Monday, October 27, 2008

The Bad Date

I have done my best to fill in the outline somewhat. Any and all suggestions would be great.

Jimmy and Chance are at the Nowhere Cafe playing a game. Jimmy predicts what the customer will order just by looking at what there wearing, the way they walk, and the attitude they project. Chance is very impressed because Jimmy nails each and every one. Jimmy tells Chance that "dating is just as easy"

Meanwhile a commercial plays on the TV urging the public to vote for GOVERNOR WAGS. Morgan can't stand the man and is trying to rally an anti Wags group in the cafe.

In walks SUMMER WAGS, the daughter of the Governor dressed in fur much to the outrage of Morgan. The people in the cafe recognize her and flock to her. Jimmy gives Chance some pointers about Summer and tells him to go for it.

(still working on what Chance actually says to Summer) but Morgan disapproves of it all, but Chance backs Summer up and they set a date.

Chance sits in a suit that doesn't fit him well or look all that impressive at a restaurant with Summer and the waiter comes over and asks for drinks. Summer orders a $4,000 bottle of wine. Chance can't believe it. The waiter turns to Chance who says he will have water. The waiter hands him a list of some of the special bottled waters to which Chance just says "tap."

Summer starts to read off selections from the menu she likes and Chance's eyes dart from price to price. When it is all said and done Chance orders a side of broccoli and Summer the steak and lobster.

Summer talks on and on about her father and the campaign and Chance goes into the fantasy. Chance is wearing a suit that fits him nicely. Chance and Summer lift their glasses and toast this overly priced glass of wine. Chance tells cheesy jokes and they both laugh like they're hilarious. Summer says her father has the perfect job for him and he asked specifically for him. (This is where we would start the West Wing fantasy, but I'm not real sure how to play this out so any ideas would be great.)

Chance snaps out of the fantasy when the check arrives. He looks down at the price in horror. Chance excuses himself to the bathroom.

In the bathroom Chance washes his face then stares at the mirror before breaking the 4th wall to tell us "Shit". Chance then looks to his left to see the bathroom attendant hold a towel in one hand and the other hand outstretched for a tip. Chance leaves the bathroom in hurry.

Summer is waiting for Chance when he exits and she says she paid the bill. Chance is relieved. As soon as they get out to the street the manager comes running toward them. They bolt down the street with Chance in a terror while Summer loves the thrill of not paying for the meal.

Summer is driving both of them back to her place. Chance doesn't know what to say beside ask her if she does this a lot. At that moment police lights flash behind them as they're being pulled over. Summer freaks out as she has illegal drugs on her(any ideas of what kind they should be would be great). Summer urges Chance to take the fall for her, but he refuses as the officer approaches the window Summer throws the bag of drugs on Chance's lap. Chance fumbles around with it before throwing it to the car floor. The officer says he caught them speeding. Just as the officer is shining his flashlight into the face of terrified Chance he gets called on his radio about a protest getting violent. (callback to Morgan's protest of Governor Wags. The officer tells them to have a good night and lets them off.

The next morning Chance walks into the Nowhere Cafe and spots Morgan sitting at a table. They beat around the bush for a moment about their nights before Chance admits her protest saved him.

(I would like to end it with some kind of callback to Jimmy. Somehow him not wanting to admit that Morgan was right about Summer and he was wrong.)

Let me know what you think.

4 comments:

Danger said...

Since we talked about the Lohan/Hilton reference, the drugs she has shouldn't be typical street drugs. Maybe pills, like Oxycontin or something?

Also, here's a parody of the West Wing tracking shot, just to give you some idea. haha.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SnxQk8C_-kE

Evan said...

I think it sounds really good so far, Chris. The visual references from reality vs. fantasy are great (poorly fitting/well fitting suit, drinking water vs. wine). Her rambling (as you'd expect from someone so self-important) is a perfect opportunity for him to take a fantasy break. The astronimical check is a great shock for him to see when he snaps out of it.

Leaving the bathroom with wet hands to avoid the attendent is hilarious. The surprise of the manager chasing them down after she said she paid is a great reveal. The scare of the cop and the drugs being thrown back and forth is great too.

In the end, it becomes a great rung on the friendship ladder of Chance and Morgan.

As far as the last scene, couldn't Jimmy just interrupt Chance and Morgan as they talk? It would be a classic moment of disagreement between Jimmy and Morgan, leaving Chance in the middle of it.

Well, just a little two cents. Good luck with the draft.

Evan said...

By the way, weren't we ending with Chance buying Morgan that non-fat Frappy?

Where are all the bloggers this week anyway?!?!?

Unknown said...

As far as the initial conversation with Summer it would be funny for Jimmy to name Summer's drink. "Check out the body on that non-fat 130 degree latte." Then chance could ask her if he could buy her a non fat 130 degree latte and of course she'd be impressed he knew what she wanted. Easy in without a lot of dialogue or any more setup.

I will ponder further.